Re: PRESS RELEASE DRAFT

From: Fred McLain <mclain_at_zipcon_dot_net>
Date: Sat Nov 13 2004 - 13:45:00 CST

Hi Alan and all,

Other then the tone issue we discussed yesterday I like what you've
written. Is there any way we can inject a note of optimism? Perhaps by
pointing out that verified voting systems have been demonstrated?

        -Fred-

On Fri, 2004-11-12 at 17:06, Fred McLain wrote:
> Frankly I haven't taken the time to read this press release yet. On
> this one point I'd say that 'disenfranchised' or even worse,
> 'disenfranchisement' isn't something that resonates. It sounds like
> we're trying to start a Burger King(tm).
>
> How about "didn't vote"?
>
> -Fred-
>
> Keep it simple.
>
> On Fri, 2004-11-12 at 12:22, Joel Harris wrote:
> > Alan Dechert wrote:
> >
> > Long lines, registration problems, and a multitude of other problems meant
> > that countless voters were disenfranchised.
> >
> > -------------
> >
> > What does this mean? The term "disenfranchised" is jargon (in my opinion, largely meaningless). Why not say something like "...voters were discouraged from voting" or "...votes were not correctly counted" or whatever the real concern is.
> >
> > Regards,
> > Joel
> >
> >
>
>
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