Re: Draft 2 -- letter to EAC commissioners

From: David Mertz <voting-project_at_gnosis_dot_cx>
Date: Mon May 10 2004 - 19:40:00 CDT

> It's not done but it's coming along. Maybe one or two more
> iterations. FYI,
> the eac is at www.eac.gov

Good job, Alan. I think it looks like a very good letter of
introduction.

Two more small changes I would suggest:

> It is proper that a public process like voting be best served with
> public
> software.

I think the word 'best' is superfluous and a bit awkward (it was in the
"seems" version too, but I failed to improve it in my recommended
change to "proper")

> The Open Voting Consortium is the organization most actively
> promoting this mode of election administration, and we would be happy
> to
> participate in the next EAC hearing.

More on the active voice/forceful tone thing:

   ...election administration, and we would like to participate in...
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